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Awakening is like
Awakening is like
Dragging yesterday's sleep
Into tomorrow's dream ~
In between
There is some fuzzy source of light
Wanting to be noticed
~
But if third eye reverie
Is not quite your style
Awakening
Can simply be
Little more
Than the ritual
Dawn jangle
Of an alarm clock
~
4 comments:
"dragging yesterday's sleep into tomorrow's dream" is a terrific image. I also like the switch into the pedestrian in the second stanza. From personal experience - a device best used sparingly.
I felt a little sad with your comment. The word pedestrian, when used as part of a critique, usually implies "ordinary", a subtle but negative comment.
In actual fact, I intended the last stanza to sound a little pedestrian on the surface; and that was the irony. I don't like direct sarcasm, so chose a gentle way of digging at those who have a ritualised awakening. This idea was implied by "little more".
Perhaps it was a little too subtle.
Gemma
very nice write... makes me thankful i haven't had to have an alarm to wake up to in many a year...
Some people are awake yet without dreams, I'd rather let them sleep and dream. Perhaps in that way they may live. For what is life without a dream? What's the reason for awakening? Many are like living dead, awake yet sleeping, and what's worse than not having a dream.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
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