tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post370157619785451898..comments2024-03-02T20:00:50.737+11:00Comments on Gemma's ~~~ "Greyscale Territory" ~~~~~~~ Poetic Songlines: Sylphs of Old DecayGemma Wisemanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-67113901192684308402012-06-20T09:10:20.960+10:002012-06-20T09:10:20.960+10:00This poem certainly is true to the Celtic roots of...This poem certainly is true to the Celtic roots of the form. Nicely done, haunting and yet more.Mystic_Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00099062213372011260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-91675659287513759182012-06-20T02:14:04.141+10:002012-06-20T02:14:04.141+10:00Elegant and with such distinct images! Well done!Elegant and with such distinct images! Well done!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-60619058303229010062012-06-20T02:12:29.792+10:002012-06-20T02:12:29.792+10:00VERY good!!! I'm glad to have read this it'...VERY good!!! I'm glad to have read this it's elegantly rendered with distinct images!! Smiles to you in Melbourne!!Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-34430768056475689062012-06-18T05:09:20.625+10:002012-06-18T05:09:20.625+10:00Enjoyed this... great adherence to the form (which...Enjoyed this... great adherence to the form (which I found challenging).Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-19009665677128839512012-06-18T04:03:13.868+10:002012-06-18T04:03:13.868+10:00Great mood and a lilting cadence. Enjoyed it.Great mood and a lilting cadence. Enjoyed it.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-84295313174401959152012-06-18T03:25:51.990+10:002012-06-18T03:25:51.990+10:00This is so foreboding! I feel like I need to gathe...This is so foreboding! I feel like I need to gather any stray babies and get inside.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-31982175906616907892012-06-18T00:20:59.932+10:002012-06-18T00:20:59.932+10:00You really have captured the idea of the earth bei...You really have captured the idea of the earth being in distress as you wrote in this most challenging form! My favorite stanza was the first - wonderful wording.<br /><br />Mine: http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2012/06/renegade.htmlMaryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-32003133863265074512012-06-17T21:49:09.751+10:002012-06-17T21:49:09.751+10:00Those muted clouds bring melancholy and distress ~...Those muted clouds bring melancholy and distress ~ Great to see you at Real Toads ~<br /><br />GraceScarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-39436891230179333112012-06-17T15:52:42.574+10:002012-06-17T15:52:42.574+10:00I liked that you used the first word as your last,...I liked that you used the first word as your last, and agree that the melancholy tone suits the form very well - there is a keening in the air.<br /><br />Thank you for participating in the Real Toads Mini-Challenge.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-82496466896265006792012-06-17T15:05:19.689+10:002012-06-17T15:05:19.689+10:00Agree with Sherry - very beautiful. You have some ...Agree with Sherry - very beautiful. You have some exquisite half-rhymes here. Widened / muted may be stretching it a bit!? Butit doesn't lessen the power of the ending.Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3467673506431999910.post-30268806888598397312012-06-17T10:25:39.985+10:002012-06-17T10:25:39.985+10:00This is very beautiful, with a tragic undertone, e...This is very beautiful, with a tragic undertone, evocative of Celtic poetry! SO well done. I tried this form and got nowhere fast!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.com